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ENG-106 Peer Review Worksheet: Proposal Essay
Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.
Name of the draft’s author: FORMTEXT
Keelay Heaton
Name of the peer reviewer: FORMTEXT Deneishia Jones
Reviewer
After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.
FORMTEXT I think that the essay meets the requirements of the assignments because it included a clear title and the first paragraph provides brief overview of the issue. Topic sentences are also created in each para that gives the idea of the next one.
After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.
Proposal Content and Ideas
How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make in this proposal?
FORMTEXT The thesis statement specify the points on the basis of which organs selling is considered as illegal.
How successfully does the paper focus on presenting a well-reasoned proposal?
FORMTEXT The paper focuses on presenting a well-reasoned proposal by including statistics and figures.
How persuasively is evidence used to justify ideas and enrich the essay?
FORMTEXT Literary evidence is used for justifying the ideas. Different studies like Hippen et al., (2009) are used for providng the argument.
How effectively does the essay incorporate strategies that support proposals (e.g., categorical, resemblance, ethical claims, and cause and effect claims)?
FORMTEXT The essay has incorporated strtagies for supportint proposal such as ethcial claims. The ethical considerations are fulfilled by adding references for the soruces.
Organization
How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper?
FORMTEXT The introduction is constructed in a well-organzied manner. It provides summary of the topic and identifies why it needs to be discussed. Topic sentece adds more clarity.
Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below.
FORMTEXT The thesis statement is in last of the introduction. It is stated as, "In order to fix this shortage of organs, the United States needs to decide to keep the selling of personal organs illegal so that it will encourage people to donate their organs, reduce the use of the black market, as well as keeping the view of human’s bodies as more important than money".
How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas?
FORMTEXT The topic sentences provides idea of the main argument. This gives the reader idea of what's happening.
How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay?
FORMTEXT Conclusion is staisfactory because it provides summary of the topic.
Format
How closely does the paper follow GCU formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical GCU format?
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Are all sources listed on the references page in GCU format?
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Is the required minimum number of sources listed?
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Language Use and Style
Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone.
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing?
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Grammar and Mechanics
Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.
FORMCHECKBOX Yes FORMCHECKBOX No FORMTEXT Add optional clarification here
Three things that I liked about your draft are:
FORMTEXT The structure of the essay.
FORMTEXT A clear introduction yielding idea about the argument.
FORMTEXT The topic sentences in each praragraph.
Three things that could be improved are:
FORMTEXT The ending of each paragraph.
FORMTEXT Use of more quotations for adding evidentary support.
FORMTEXT More sources can be used.
Question: There are some fallacies in the proposal such as in the statement, “by allowing organs to be sold to be legalized, it encourages people to put a price on people and their body parts”. This statement is not supported with adequate evidence that makes it a fallacy.
Fallacies like this can be avoided by including facts and supporting the claims with reliable and valid sources.
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