English

Final Film Critique

Martin Gutierrez

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Author Note

English

Prewriting:

Topic: a lively public place

Mind map: enthusiasm, children, friends, families, swings, food stalls, fairy lights, balloons, clown, games, fireworks, exhibition, shooting games,

Draft: There was a funfair in the city. There were a lot of people there. There were families and children. There were varieties of swings and many food stalls. I really like fairy lights and balloons. A clown was there too. Young people were playing games and children were watching the magic show. I played games. People were eating. Women and girls were at the exhibition. Everyone was happy. In the end of the funfair, there were fireworks too.

Essay:

In the life full of hustle and bustle, people hardly get time to visit places. I am also part of such a society, so it is often difficult for me to get some time and see what is going on in the world. It was Sunday night when I opened my door and saw my three friends standing out there. They were all dressed up so I somehow got the idea that we must be going somewhere tonight. They then told me that we all are going to funfair tonight. It was a very lively public place I could ever be describing.

It was 9’o clock when we reached there. There was a huge crowd of people near the entrance gate. The people were looking very enthusiastic. As we entered in the area, there were a lot of swings at the left side. All the children were found playing there. As we move forward, there was a smell of spice in the air, so upon looking at the right side, we found some bunch of food stalls. Families were standing near almost every stall, and they were having some delicious food to enjoy the evening. Between the food stalls, there were stalls of different things. As we went closer, we found that there were stalls of art and cultural exhibition. There was a variety of art that was displayed in the exhibition. Mostly females were standing in front of those stalls. It was a lively place, indeed. There were lighting everywhere. The funfair was decorated very beautifully. There were: fairy lights, prompts and balloons. The clown was also there to create a joyful atmosphere.

After roaming around, we end at the games spot. I played a shooting game and won a teddy bear. The place looked like it was something out of this world. There were no worries and tensions of workload. All that I saw was happy and lively faces of the people. In the end, fireworks were displayed as a closing gesture of the funfair.

Prewriting:

Topic: Your favorite family picture

Mind map: Family trip, photo album, memories, Captiva Island, summers, happiness, enjoyment, Florida, complete family, memories, sunsets, beautiful scenes

Draft: I remember the family trip we had. I was with my parents and uncles and aunts. My cousins were here, too, and my grandparents too. The picture was lively. I was looking at the photo album, and I found the picture of our last trip to Florida. We enjoyed a lot. We had a lot of memories. Everyone was happy and enjoying the trip. My whole family was in one picture. We were in Florida in summers. That was my favorite family picture. There was a sunset scene in the photo. There was a bright sunny day.

Essay: Memories are part of a person's life. They play a major role in building up emotions: happiness or sadness. Whenever I see my photo album, I always pick the family photo which was taken in Florida. The memories of that family trip will never fade. Every time I see that family photo, I can recall each and every event that has happened that day.

Summers were always a blessing for us. We usually organized our trip in summers. We were living the best part of life in Florida last summers. My whole family: parents, grandparents, uncles and aunts, and cousins, everyone was there to create some beautiful memories. The photo we took at Captiva Island was my favorite photo. The special thing about that photo was we all were in there. My grandparents were sitting in the middle of the photo. At the right side of my grandfather, my father was sitting, and my mother was sitting next to him. At the left side of my grandmother, my uncle and aunt were sitting. I was standing right behind my father and the rest: cousins and siblings were standing beside me. It was a complete family photo we ever had. We all were wearing bright and colourful clothes. The picture looked very lively. The background of the photo was very captivating. The sea was right behind us, and the sun was setting. My whole family in one picture is not the only beauty of my favorite photo, but the scene behind us was also soothing. There was no crowd of people at that time, so it was a perfect family photo we had.

It was not only my favorite family photo, but everyone loved it. We made copies of that photo, and everyone had it in their photo album. The angle of the picture was accurate. We all were looking in the same direction, and the picture came out good in just first attempt. We always talked about this photo in every family gatherings. This photo was very close to my heart as it helped us to live those precious and beautiful moments again.